I love this one! I know it's an excerpt, but I think it really does work as a drabble - character, setting, conflict, and climax are all there with no external information required. Gender conflict + consumer culture = win.
I would love to read the complete work once it's finished!
One grammatical nitpick:
She knew which she wants, but as she picked it up she tried to seem as though she was considering her choice -- the smallest bar, wrapped in soft white paper with rose petals.
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Date: 2009-12-04 01:41 pm (UTC)I would love to read the complete work once it's finished!
One grammatical nitpick:
She knew which she wants, but as she picked it up she tried to seem as though she was considering her choice -- the smallest bar, wrapped in soft white paper with rose petals.
She knew which she wanted, but...